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puddingsmith ([personal profile] hope) wrote2006-10-12 11:28 pm

And the little one said

Supernatural; John, Dean/Sam, pre-series, PG-13. Fits into my newly-fledged ot3 'verse. This one occurs before El Camino Real. Unbeta'd, a bit scribbly.


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[identity profile] fatale.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 06:00 pm (UTC)(link)
scribbly? try perfect. man, I liked this. whisper-soft, surreal.

[identity profile] kitsune-red.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 06:24 pm (UTC)(link)
mmmmmmm.

[identity profile] kitsune-red.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 06:46 pm (UTC)(link)
I like the way you think, lady.

I can't get enough of SproutingTeenSammy. ;)

Mmm.. I had a lot of cousins around while I was growing up. One of my mom's sisters had a family of four, and three of them were boys. I loved visiting them. It was like.. this whole different world that -- even though it was just my little sister and me in our family -- I instantly, primally recognized, and envied. Boys, you know? BOYS.

The one closest in age to me was a couple years younger. So I think he hit fourteen when I was about just-turned-sixteen. Talk about your serious imprinting. Oh man. And I love how you emphasize the bones of Sammy's hands, because that's just perfect. Not just.. he was big, and bumping into stuff. That never really encapsulates it for me.

And it's not just that they're bony, it's that.. it's like.. there's this new power underneath their skin, like.. *tsk* okay, don't laugh, but it's like, their new adulthood, their new manhood is growing inside them, stretching them almost beyond their capacity to contain it, and they burn with it. An invisible illumination. Half-angelic, with all the horrible, frightening power of destruction and creation that angels can claim.

I have always, always wanted that, envied it, hated it even, just a little.

I love men. They're so.. *flail.*

[identity profile] sharpest_rose.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 09:21 pm (UTC)(link)
I love the way John notices the similarities between himself and Dean and between Mary and Sam. The way you write the physicality of John, and his interactions with the reality of the world, is very striking.

[identity profile] gillianinoz.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 10:09 pm (UTC)(link)
I love John's POV - the way he hears and sees and smells what's going on. Sleepy and sensual and weary. Just perfect.

Also love the title, by the way.

[identity profile] kitsune-red.livejournal.com 2006-10-12 11:34 pm (UTC)(link)
exactly. hormone soup. in almost total isolation from the rest of the world.

any associations they have with *anything*, let alone the whole powerful mixup of sex, must necessarily lead back to father and brother.

yay!

[identity profile] maharetr.livejournal.com 2006-10-13 12:41 am (UTC)(link)
This is beautiful. I love external (to the Dean/Sam r'ship) stories, and John POV? Oh, be still my beating heart!

[identity profile] nixwilliams.livejournal.com 2006-10-14 01:01 pm (UTC)(link)
YAY! oh, this is wonderful- on its own, and as a prequel to el camino real (i did want the full explanation of "It’s not like this is the first time they’ve done this. Not like this is the first time he’s seen this"!)

i love the sketchy-tired john pov, the snippets of sensory memories: playing football with dean, sleepysexing mary. his tiredness, and the notion that he is thinking (almost subconsciously) "me=dean, mary=sam", and his half/non/muted-reaction make perfect sense.

and i love your sam. on a slightly related note, there is a farm down the end of the street here in north london, and THERE ARE YAKS! YAKS, I TELL YOU!!!

[identity profile] sajee.livejournal.com 2006-10-15 03:50 am (UTC)(link)
This is fantastic and makes me want to cry at the same time.

*dies*
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[personal profile] amalthia 2006-10-20 09:56 pm (UTC)(link)
I really love your stories. Again the imagery just draws me in as well as the whole messed up situation but it doesn't really feel messed up in your stories. It really doesn't surprise me if you get two teenage boys together...

[identity profile] dullemarulle.livejournal.com 2006-11-29 09:26 pm (UTC)(link)
I'm liking this verse of yours more and more :)
And I love that it's John pov, we don't see that too often.

The bed's far too small for the three of them; if they relaxed their bodies would loosen, unavoidably brush against his but they don't. They don't turn away, either.

Perfect ending.