OMG, I love this idea. It is SO cool. And you write it so that it actually sounds plausible! The details, like the explanation about being a surgeon, they really help to pull it all together. The voices are very good, the flow is excellent, and it's touching. And also creepy as hell.
Simon is mine. Thas all that matters.
This bit, the ending of her explanation, it creeps me right out. I started off thinking, oh, it's so touching, and ended up thinking YIKES!
The last line is perfect, and I can imagine exactly the tone of his voice and the expression on his face.
I forgot to mention that I like how this idea provides a cool explanation for why Simon never really could show affection for Kaylee. FocussedonRiverRobotSimon just can't do it.
i think what made me cackle insanely for hours after the prompt made me come up with the premise was kaylee's "robot!" line in 'the message'. because dude. it's just so CANON.
OMG! I completely forgot about that line (The Message is an episode I don't particularly enjoy so I haven't seen it 5 million times - unlike the other episodes). That subtle ep connection thing you've done here makes this fic even more cool.
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This bit, the ending of her explanation, it creeps me right out. I started off thinking, oh, it's so touching, and ended up thinking YIKES!
The last line is perfect, and I can imagine exactly the tone of his voice and the expression on his face.
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thankyou for the feedback omg. the tams are creepifying.
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i think what made me cackle insanely for hours after the prompt made me come up with the premise was kaylee's "robot!" line in 'the message'. because dude. it's just so CANON.
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OMG! I completely forgot about that line (The Message is an episode I don't particularly enjoy so I haven't seen it 5 million times - unlike the other episodes). That subtle ep connection thing you've done here makes this fic even more cool.