OMG, I love this idea. It is SO cool. And you write it so that it actually sounds plausible! The details, like the explanation about being a surgeon, they really help to pull it all together. The voices are very good, the flow is excellent, and it's touching. And also creepy as hell.
Simon is mine. Thas all that matters.
This bit, the ending of her explanation, it creeps me right out. I started off thinking, oh, it's so touching, and ended up thinking YIKES!
The last line is perfect, and I can imagine exactly the tone of his voice and the expression on his face.
I forgot to mention that I like how this idea provides a cool explanation for why Simon never really could show affection for Kaylee. FocussedonRiverRobotSimon just can't do it.
i think what made me cackle insanely for hours after the prompt made me come up with the premise was kaylee's "robot!" line in 'the message'. because dude. it's just so CANON.
OMG! I completely forgot about that line (The Message is an episode I don't particularly enjoy so I haven't seen it 5 million times - unlike the other episodes). That subtle ep connection thing you've done here makes this fic even more cool.
River is creepy. I mean, this was amazing, but River is ultra-creepy. I think I love her for it, though, y'know? As someone else might say, creepifyin'. :D
Whoa. For a second at the first, you had me convinced that River had killed him. And then with the bigger surprise. But this is remarkably believable, slightly creepy, and very powerful. Very cool.
Woah. This really works! It's scarily plausible. Really gives me food for thought. Thanks so much for a disturbing and creepy fic! Looking forward to the next Four Things that never happened to poor Simon...
That suits Simon. A lot. River is eerie, gorgeously eerie, just all matter-of-fact about things that horrify everybody else, and just quietly dealing. And the last line is so sad kinda.
wow. this is an incredible story. never really thought about it. but yes, i do remember kaylee calling simon a robot. but it works. it really works. and i like the idea. the ending is good. i love river's reactions to simon.
Wow! I just came across this, and let me say, WOW! It was so amazingly believeable -- and I loved Simon 'waking up' and saying River's name at the end, it gave the whole piece a very eerie, Tam-like feeling. Keep up the great work!
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This bit, the ending of her explanation, it creeps me right out. I started off thinking, oh, it's so touching, and ended up thinking YIKES!
The last line is perfect, and I can imagine exactly the tone of his voice and the expression on his face.
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thankyou for the feedback omg. the tams are creepifying.
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i think what made me cackle insanely for hours after the prompt made me come up with the premise was kaylee's "robot!" line in 'the message'. because dude. it's just so CANON.
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OMG! I completely forgot about that line (The Message is an episode I don't particularly enjoy so I haven't seen it 5 million times - unlike the other episodes). That subtle ep connection thing you've done here makes this fic even more cool.
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But in the best way. I can't wait to see the rest!
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I just...yes. love.
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heart!
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Worth the extra vowels. Here, have a vowel.
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thankyou for the feedback :)
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You = Talent
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:-)
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yeah, it kind of struck me as quite, well, possible. also, i love creepy!river.
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